With the back to back holidays, come the back to back Susanna Leonard Hill writing contests. This holiday season the entries are all about HEROES! I can’t wait to read them all. They’re bound to be packed with inspiration. What better way to start the season? Read all about the contest here.
Now for mine:
SNOOZY
Sing along, HERE COMES SUZY SNOWFLAKE, DRESSED IN HER SNOW WHITE GOWN…
We’re all familiar with the heroic Suzy – tapping on windows, building snowmen, providing sleigh rides with an ultra smooth glide. Christmas isn’t Christmas without her.
Unlike Suzy is her brother Snoozy.
Snoozy never floats to the ground on Christmas. He stays tucked in his cloud… sleeping.
“Will you help this year?” Suzy always asks.
But he just yaaaaaawns, and rolls over.
One Christmas after Suzy flitted to the ground, Snoozy’s crystals began to tingle.
He opened one eye. Naughty winds were chasing away the clouds.
The sun blazed down.
Without the clouds, all things Christmassy would melt…
…including Suzy!
Snoozy bounded across the sky.
First he gathered the little clouds, tying them together with bits of rainbow.
Next, the medium clouds. These guys were fast.
The most difficult were the big clouds. He tugged and tugged but the winds tugged the other way.
The sun sweltered. Those troublesome winds had to go!
With all his strength, Snoozy zigged and zagged and looped in circles around the winds.
Annoyed, they finally gave up, and blustered away.
Then for hours, Snoozy heaved, hoisted, hefted, and hauled until every last cloud was in its place.
When Suzy returned that night, Snoozy was sound asleep.
“Sleep well, Brother. Maybe you can help next Christmas.”
But the next Christmas…
…Snoozy slept in.
I still think he deserves a verse of his own, HERE LIES SNOOZY SNOWFLAKE, WRAPPED IN HIS SNOW WHITE CLOUD…
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Thank you for reading!
Lots of fun language and a very original take indeed. I enjoyed it. Bravo. good luck in the contest, too.
I always appreciate your thoughts, Kathy. Thanks so much!
Snoozy really came through! Lots of great action language and a fun story! Best of luck!
He does come through. Good ol’ Snoozy. Thanks, Judy.
Snoozy, the unsung hero! There’s a lovely tone to your language (I sometimes read in colors). Great job!
I love that you read in color! Thanks for reading.
Heaved, hoisted, hefted and hauled! Great alliteration and writing throughout the story…it was fun hearing about Suzy Snowflakes brother…like a back story to something we are very familiar. And I think he should get some credit also. Well done, David!
Thank you so much, Vivian! Your opinion means a lot to me.
David…I had to leave another comment because I just went to your BOOKS page…and I, too, don’t know why there aren’t any books there yet. You are such a good writer and you are SOOOO funny…that page is hilarious and I love it!!!
Ha! I try to make it fun. You don’t know how much I appreciate your support.
This is a sweet story, with wonderful images!
I’m glad you enjoyed it!
great verbs! fun language! I love that Snoozy is an unsung hero.
Thanks so much. I’m quite proud of that not so lazy snowflake myself.
Snoozy reminds me of one of the dwarves in Snow White and the Seven Dwarves. I had a picture of Snoozy with a sleepy face and droopy hat. Thank you
Ha. That would be adorable. Thank you!
Great fun, David! So creative. I am going to have Snoozy Snowflake singing in my head all day now!
It is on on a constant loop in my head. A catch tune. Too catchy. Ha.
So happy that Snoozy awakened long enough to bring back the clouds. This was a fun, and funny, story. I especially liked how you twisted the idea of chasing clouds away to bringing them back. Who knew we needed them so! Hooray for Snoozy & you!
Thank you so much. I loved how this story grew out of the original.
David, this story is filled with action, alliteration and read-aloud-ability! Love the clever tie-in with Suzy Snowflake. I see this as a picture book… Great story!
Thanks, Traci!
Awesome David! Yes Snoozy should get credit for what he did but the spirit of Christmas wants us to give and not take and never ask anything in exchange. We do what we can because we love doing it. Not for the credit. I loved this. Congrats and good luck!
Thank you Eleanor. Snoozy is a pretty good guy.
What a fun story. I’d like to get a little more sleep myself. Perhaps I’ll join Snoozy in the clouds. Good luck!
Wouldn’t we all! thanks so much.
What a great image, tying the small clouds together with bits of rainbow! Love the language!
Thank you, Nancy. Those small clouds are hard to keep together!
Love this fun story, David! Poor Snoozy had his work cut out for him to save Suzy and the white Christmas…and he didn’t even get the credit! Truly heroic! Love that he tied the clouds with rainbows, and how he had to herd them and heft and haul and heave hoist – great language! Nicely done 🙂 Thanks for joining in the Holiday fun!
Thanks, Susanna. I always enjoy participating.